Comments on: The Divorce

By: Jayson

Jayson — Sat, 01 Oct 2011 04:36:27 +0000

i really like the poem! I can feel the emotions because i can relate to it. i thought i was already a stone, that i can no longer be moved by such things. but i was wrong. the pain came back again of having gone through this, but now i am thankful for it. atleast i am reminded how aweful it was, and im not coming back to it.

By: Cecil W. Gall

Cecil W. Gall — Thu, 29 Sep 2011 17:12:43 +0000

No one has ever chosen to be born or to live a life full of uncertainties. But once life springs forth, a man must face whatever plight he has at hand. There is no turning back, only a destination he cannot pass. Your poem is a vivid presentation of an emotion manifested by a human being in search for a kind of relief that only God can give.

By: Rosema

Rosema — Sat, 10 Sep 2011 02:16:29 +0000

I dont know how to say it but this is very interesting..Very unique poem..

By: Mary

Mary — Sun, 31 Jul 2011 06:45:12 +0000

Though I felt a little sad at the beginning because of the topic “divorce” and some sentences, such as “You just live once,
and then you’re dead, and happiness is all a myth, the road ahead is clouded with monstrosities”. However, the last strophe “The choice is yours, To live or burn, To hear the lies Or to return” which is also my favourite brought me back to brightness. That is, the choice is make by us, we always have the right to choose.

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Bryon Gunter — Sun, 12 Jun 2011 03:49:32 +0000

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By: Anna

Anna — Sat, 12 Dec 2009 04:45:32 +0000

@Uncontested – The madman in this story is the local psychiatrist.

By: Uncontested Divorce Forms

Uncontested Divorce Forms — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 12:10:04 +0000

I’m curious, Who is the madman in the poem? I’d love to get a discussion going here. Thoughts?
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By: Brian

Brian — Thu, 06 Dec 2007 20:34:00 +0000

Keep safe distance.
Cite your claims.
Let the fog
Enshroud your shame.

that just set up everything so nicely... a great balance between emotion of love, and the sterility of a contract. nicely done.

By: janetleigh

janetleigh — Sat, 24 Nov 2007 14:29:00 +0000

I love this, Anna. This is a little different than your others in that the lines are way shorter and dem thangs rhyme, too ;> but your rhyming pairs are great, especially:

claims and shame
remorse and endorse

and the following are great lines, too:

"shut your eyes, And touch your scar,"
"Remember what the madman said."
and then repeating "The madman said"

All in all, this is a great read and it's amazing you did this while driving..;>

By: Ario

Ario — Fri, 23 Nov 2007 10:23:00 +0000

Agree with everyone above. This works very well. There are some interesting rhyming connections there that made me think and propel the poem on nicely from the start: claims and shame and remorse and endorse for example.

Label them, they can be named: stood out for me for some reason.

Again, one of those well crafted and exquisitely structured poems of yours.

(pssst...note a little typo btw: your dead should be you're dead hope you don't mind me mentioning it...I think you're like me and would like to know:))